In the feedback I have got there are some comments about how I introduce my characters. Some I agree with. Some made me do some research about how others write these things.
Here is an example:
I completely agree with the opinion that this is a too short description of the second most important character in the script.
But I was told it should look like this as well:
I’ve always felt this is a stiff way to introduce a character. I don’t need to know the precise age of every character. “Early thirties” reads much better to me.
I checked with johnaugust.com and his article How to introduce a character.
Not one of his examples include precise age within parenthesis.
What a relief!
It is always a relief when the way I feel I want to write it is perfectly alright.
I also had comments about an unimportant character with the name of Tina. She has two lines in one scene. She carries a tray with cups into the boarding room. No particular description at all.
“What is her age?” I was asked.
In the same article John August points out that the longer description of a character is, the more important do we as readers expect the character to be.
I see her clearly myself, but I didn’t want to waste my reader’s attention. Perhaps I should add “a woman with perfection as her ideal”, to give the whole scene a better description.
But her age, no. It does not feel like it adds something to the scene.